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留学书信:个人陈述

应学生之邀,我有偿地、认真地写了一封奖学金申请用的个人陈述。该奖学金要求在文中重点介绍:

- 学习方面的成绩

- 担任过的职责

- 为什么应该获得奖学金

- 500字以内

我写完了之后,学生说:
老师,您好,我看了文章,反正打死我也写不出来,我有点担心您写的太好了啊,我的雅思是6分,写出这么好的东西,他们会信么?
 
应该会信的,因为人会进步嘛,况且我也没有用什么特别罕见的大词或句子结构,只有一个倒装。
 
这个反应让我想起一个卖成人用品的老板遇到的一个客户需求:男生需要缩短时间速战速决的......
 
下面就是个人陈述:

Essay  (492 words)

As a strong candidate, I would like to apply for the xxx Scholarship. Not only am I qualified in academic excellence, but also in leadership and social skills, as well as in my future career plan.

Firstly, I have earned numerous awards for my academic achievements. I am particularly proud of my score for my major, Supply Chain Management, which was number one in my class; another example worth mentioning is that I received a grade of A in all three assessments administered by the university. I was even granted a scholarship based on my examination results.

Secondly, I have also been actively assuming responsibility in the student community by acting as the Life Co-ordinator of my class. The main duty was to manage the daily life of students, such as to supervise students in the cleaning of their dorms and to ensure that forbidden electric appliances were not used in the dorms, for safety concerns. Other duties included organizing excursions for students, where I, as a team leader, needed to assign tasks to other student assistants and supervised them in areas such as transport, food and drinks and safety.  In addition, I participated in a variety of extra-curricular activities, such as a university debate competition, where I won praises by teachers and the Best-Debater title.

Another experience you might be interested in knowing is my internship.  One served as a superb opportunity for me to use my English in the real-world scenarios. In 2008, I interned in a hotel as an English-speaking front-desk receptionist, where I received foreign guests and introduced the cultural and historical sites of China. I also handled complaints on the services of the hotel and then summarized the solutions orally to the team leader. Sometimes, I also needed to explain to the guests how to use the facilities in the hotel rooms.

Another internship experience was related to my major. It was with Zheke Corporation, which specializes in computer sales. I job shadowed in the after-sales team to optimize their workflow. Through close observation and direct involvement in communicating with the suppliers, confirming the ordered products and models in stock, and relaying messages to the delivery team, I discovered problems which resulted in delayed response to the orders, which translated into unhappy customers. The reasons ranged from staffing and scheduling issues to poor selection of suppliers. The case study was used in my term paper.